During a semester abroad learning the traditional music of a little country tucked away in the stans of central Asia, the students' own ambitions and desires get mixed up with the local political intrigues for a fabulous exotic adventure!
What do you think? Should I split it up somehow? Or otherwise improve it?
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I think I'll go with the Exterminator's improved version:
While abroad in Asia studying the folk music of a little country tucked among the -stans, the students become embroiled in political intrigues and exotic adventures.
Thanks Exterminator!!! That's much better than what I had come up with!!! :D
Actually, it would be cool to have a whole paragraph, but I probably shouldn't push my luck... ;^)
What I'd like is a description like the first paragraph I wrote about Kindred Spirits or like the first half of my review of Brother Brigham, but it's tricky to write such a thing about one's own work. Author's myopia, perhaps?